I am Your Sunshine

I’m not gonna say what it is. It’s a bit embarrassing. A guilty pleasure that is not even so pleasing from time to time.

The first two chapters can be cut. All the relevant information can be obtain via characters’ dialogue or quick flashbacks that come later. You can easily see what the author is trying to do. You can tell that she wants to make the male character idealistically perfect but misunderstood and the female defensive but kind. But the thing is, it doesn’t come naturally, nor convincingly. Instead, we feel her intention rather than seeing those characteristics to be real.

Something to keep in mind.